rate my rap lyrics an give ma advice?
ok there r a few rappers from Lexington ky who run there mouth on me cuz i am a white rapper from campton ky an i am doing a song about them an here is my first verse
nothing u do or say can hurt me I never spit it twice cuz i know u heard me Ur lyrics like a blown up car at a derby Trying 2 be emcees when u don’t deserve 2 be U all should quit rapping cuz ur not worthy Make u wish u never heard of me Beat u 2 u bleed burgundy.
Now im like a sick metaphor Always leave u wanting more.
Really ur rhymes r a bore u put the audience a sleep hell i even started 2 snore. U Jus 2 fake as* rappers an im the real McCoy i murder u like bow did soulja boy fu*k it u can be souljas toy
wat do u all think
sounds amateur but keep doin tracks cuz practice makes perfect.. if your gonna use a simile (((you like…. etc..))) make sure the comparision packs punch. fabolous uses them alot but they are clever and not ordinary.
plus use multi-syllable rhyme schemes like (heard of me… burgandy) but try more clusters of them and even more syllables
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